Cry for freedom
Yoon JinSoo
March 1st in 1919, old and wood-made door opened. A man's head came out.
He looked around carefully. The door of another house opened and a boy ran out.
The boy stared at the man and smiled. The man nodded with determined attitude.
Finally the man came out from his house completely and headed to main street.
Many people followed him. In that day, country was filled with crowd's voice.
"Hurrah for Korea independence". People screamed that sentence again and
again. March 1st is independence movement day of Korea. Many people died
while they were demonstrating for independence. So we commemorate that
day every year to remember them.
In march 1st, we always display our national flag, Taegukki. Actually, we
hoist our national flag in special form in sad days. Independence movement
day looks like sad holiday, but we don't raise our national flag in special form.
Because we are proud of our ancestor's brave. Of course we cherish the
memory of our ancestors but also we celebrate our independence and thank
to our ancestors. So we hoist Taegukki in normal form at early morning.
Second, we prepare ancestral rites table for dead' spirits. There are
several rules for setting tables. First thing is about fruits. On middle of first
row, people usually put red fruits on the east side, white fruits on the west
side. Next, between fruits, people set up some jujubes, chestnuts, pears
and dried persimmons. Second, fish jerkies, herbs, soy sauce and rice
drink are set up on second row. Dry foods(Fish jerkies) must be displayed
to west side, and wet foods must be at east. There are several more
regulations that we have to observe, but that's too many to write.
They are kind of traditional rules that are succeeded from past. People
believe that if they observe rules well, spirits will be comfortable.
Last, people pray for their ancestors. Most of people make a deep
bow in front of ancestor's grave, but at the large ceremony, many priests
and monks come and progress their own rituals. In that day, they pray
and bow in front of the monument without enmity. President of korea
usually attend ceremony. All of people became together by proud
and respect.
In fact, independence movement in march 1st, 1919 didn't change
Japan's ruling powers. Japan ignored and suppressed us continuosly.
Even Japan's police are not attacked by us. People just screamed and
shouted. But it change many things. People got brave heart, and hope.
Many intellectuals started to fight with Japan and this movements are
spread over. Korean couldn't forget that day because we are
succeeded brave heart from them
Park, Jin-Kyung 200904082
ReplyDelete1. The first part of your writing really impressed me and is interesting enough, as it is so vivid that I feel like I'm reading a novel.
2. The main point of your writing seems that we display our national flag, set the table for the dead and take a bow for the spirit on independence day.
3. What I like about your essay is you demonstrated the stages of the holiday with the detail in logical order and you used various vocabulary.
4. But, the part that makes me a little confused is that you used past tense at the end of the 4th paragraph. It should be present tense..and I can also find a grammatic mistatk like "by pround and respect"..I think "with pride and respect" would be more appropriate.
201181021 Huiyeong Kim
ReplyDelete1. What I like most abut this essay is the first paragrapt. It makes me read it continuously.
2. The main point seems people commemorate Independence Movement Day annually to remember ancestor's brave.
3. The title is powerful to me. It seems it expresses well the situation of that day.
4.I think there aren't unclear thing.
5. I think if you correct grammatical mistakes such as tense in the last paragraph, your essay would be better.
Second draft
ReplyDeleteMarch 1st in 1919, old and wood-made
door opened. A man's head came out.
He looked around carefully. The door
of another house opened and a boy ran out.
The boy stared at the man and smiled.
The man nodded with determined attitude.
Finally the man came out from his house completely and headed to main street.
Many people followed him. In that day,
country was filled with crowd's voice.
"Hurrah for Korea independence". People screamed that sentence again and again.
March 1st is independence movement day of Korea. Many people died while they were demonstrating for independence. So we commemorate that day every year to remember them.
In march 1st, we always display our
national flag, Taegukki. Actually, we hoist
our national flag in special form in sad days. Independence movement day looks like sad holiday since many people died, but we don't raise our national flag in special form. Because we are proud of our ancestor's brave. Of course we cherish the memory of our ancestors but we also celebrate our independence and thank to our ancestors.
So we hoist Taegukki in normal form at early morning.
Second, we prepare ancestral rites table for dead' spirits. There are several rules for setting tables. First thing is about fruits. On middle of first row, people usually put red fruits on the east side, white fruits on the west side. Next, between fruits, people set up some jujubes, chestnuts, pears and dried persimmons. Second, fish jerkies, herbs, soy sauce and rice drink are set up on second row. Dry foods(Fish jerkies) must be displayed
to west side, and wet foods must be at east. There are several more regulations that we have to observe, but that's too many to write. They are kind of traditional rules which are succeeded from past. People believe that if they observe rules well, spirits feel comfortable.
Last, people pray for their ancestors. Most of people make a deep bow in front of ancestor's grave, but at the large ceremony, many priests and monks come and progress their own rituals. In that day, they pray and bow in front of the monument without enmity. President of korea usually attend ceremony. All of people becme together by proud and respect.
In fact, independence movement in march 1st 1919, didn't change Japan's ruling powers. Japan ignored and suppressed us continuosly. Even Japan's police were not attacked by us. All thing that people did were screaming and shouting. But it change many things. People got brave heart, and hope. Many intellectuals started to fight with Japan and this movements were spread over. Korean couldn't forget that day because we are succeeded brave heart from them
I fixed some grammatical errors. I'll try to
reduce my mistakes continuosly.