Jang Jun Hwa, Classification essay

Jang Jun Hwa

200802967

Intermediate English Writing (1)

Tuesday 7-8 period

Classification essay (first draft)

 

Born to Teach

 

 When I was a child, I wished that I had several bodies. The reason is because there were so many things I wanted to do in the future, such as a singer-songwriter, basketball player and professional traveler. However, as I grew up, I was only interested in the film industry as my future profession. Recently, I change my future goal slightly. At first, I wanted to be a film director responsible for everything about film, but now I hope to teach college students of the Film department. I think I have several strong points for my future career.

 First, I am very used to teaching. I have always tutored students as my part-time job. I have taught students some subjects such as Korean languages and English grammar. I have some know-how to make students understand in my own ways. Before I have a part-time job as a tutor, when I was in high school, many friends of mine asked me to explain the process for the math problems. Every time I taught how to solve them, my friends complimented me, saying "You have to become a teacher of professor in the future. Sometimes your explanation is easier to understand than our teachers'."

 

 In addition, English will help me become a professor. Nowadays, many universities are looking for someone who can give lecture in foreign languages, especially English. No matter what applicants major in, English becomes almost obligation. For the present, my ability in English is not good enough to do lecturing in English. However, I think I am exposed to the best environment for studying English. If I put more energy into my major, English, I will be able to teach film in English to some extent.

 Finally, I usually do not feel nervous about making presentation in front of people. This is related to my personalities. First, I am an outgoing person, so I like to meet new people. I believe that making presentation is a good opportunity to make people recognize me. This belief seems to make me feel comfortable with speaking in front of people. After presentation, I usually meet several people who come to me and say, "Do you know me? I saw you in Professor Kim's class. Your presentation was interesting." Also, I am quite optimistic. Therefore, I am always positive and confident that I will make great speech or presentation. Even though I totally mess up the presentation, I just forget about it.

 

 When it comes to becoming a professor, I have some forte, including teaching ability, English and presentation skill. However, I do not have more than enough qualities to become a professor in "Film" department. I need more creativity to work in the art world. In order to develop creativity, I do my best to have direct and indirect experiences, such as travelling and reading lots of books respectively. I strongly believe what people say, "Knowing yourself is the best shortcut to achieve your goal." I already took a first step into a shortcut to my dream.

 

 

Park Jin Kyung / five paragraph classification essay

200904082 Park Jin-Kyung   Things that Qualify me   All students are working so hard in the studies to get a job they want and put lots of effort to increase their abilities required. As everyone has their own asset and talent which can be useful for their potential carrier, I have my own as well; they are communication skills, foreign language skills and computer skills.   I have such an outgoing personality, which spontaneously makes me have a good communication skills, that I really enjoy meeting new people and make friends easily in a short time. This ability can lead me to build good relationships with the colleague, thus have a firm teamwork at the workplace and be swiftly responsive to the need from the company.   In addition, I have decent foreign language skills. I am quite comfortable with business English because I studied for Toeic and got 950 at the last test and I also have the grade A in Teps. Apart from English, I speak German a little as I majored in German literature and language in the former university. These skills will be beneficial for me when applying for a job.   Lastly, I have general knowledge in computer software such as MS Word, Excel and Power Point. These days, computer skills are almost necessary in this paperless world and this trend will be more intensified in the future. Since lots of paperwork is being replaced by the computer work and important meetings are done with computer screen turned on, this skill is indispensable ability to get a job.   To conclude, I have excellent communication skills, foreign language skills and computer skills. I believe these skills will be advantageous when I try to get a job and I am still trying to promote my abilities in many ways to qualify myself.

Jang Jun Hwa, an argumentative essay p. 114

Jang Jun Hwa

200802967

Intermediate English Writing (1)

Tuesday 7-8 period

an argumentative essay(first draft)

 

 

Stop the Unstoppable Growth of Fast Food

 

             Well-Being trend can not stop 'them'. They are fast food chains. Nowadays, most of us are seeking healthy and slow food because of problems of fast food. However, strangely, the number of fast food chains has been increasing all over the world. [For example, when it comes to Japanese food service industry, the industry has slimmed down by 18% since 1997. Nevertheless, the fast food companies have always had a surplus.] Should we let these fast food chains grow? No. I think we should stop them from growing, because they have many disadvantages.

             Many fast food companies invent many healthy foods with fresh ingredient, but those are as unbalanced nutritionally as ever. In recent year, People are interested in well-being food and mind eating fast food. In order to draw customers again, the fast food companies made healthy menu, such as hamburgers made from rice or chicken fried in good extra-virgin olive oil. Their effort to change their menu is good, but it is not enough. Fast foods are still high in calories and people can hardly get minerals and vitamins from them. In addition, product developers in fast food companies can not change ingredients of soft drinks which people drink with fast food.

             The increasing price is another problem. Fast food, especially hamburger, is the food which children like. When I was in elementary school, I could hear the voice of my friends so many times, "Today is my birthday, so let's have a party in McDonald's after school!" However, recently, it is hard to watch children coming to fast food franchise store with their friends. In my opinion, one of the reasons children can not come is the price. Also, the price of new menu to keep up with 'well-being' trend is really high. The reason is because its ingredients are comparatively expensive, but I do not think the price is not reasonable.

             In my opinion, the most serious problem of fast food chains is that they make a lot of environmental pollution. The most of fast food franchise provide delivery or take-out services. At this point, the stores usually use single-use containers. Hamburger wrappers and pizza boxes are vinyl coated paper and the tops of soda bottles are plastic. Finally, fast food staffs put all foods in the plastic bags. Only in McDonalds', more than 50 million people all over the world visit and buy hamburgers every single day. Imagine. How much disposable materials are ending up in the trash!

            The growth of fast food chains should be controlled. There are so many problems that fast food chains cause, including unbalanced food, the soaring price and environmental pollution. Maybe, it is almost impossible to stop fast food companies from growing. The growth of them seems to be unstoppable. There is one of the first and most important ways to solve many problems fast food chains. The fast food companies themselves should try harder  to make positive effects of their growth than anyone else.

 

 

Hwang Yoo Jung, an argumentative essay on page 114

Voting as a Choice, Not an Obligation

 

Hwang Yoo Jung  200904349

Intermediate English Writing I (Tue 78)

An argumentative essay on page 114 (first draft)

 

 

Whenever election time is nearing, a stale social issue in Korea reappears. That is the very low voting rate in national elections. In fact, according to a report about national voting rate released in 2009 by International IDEA(Institute for Democracy and Electoral Assistance), Korea stayed in the 26th rank among the OECD's 30 members. Some people believe that this low voting rate is blocking progress in democracy. So, they suggest that the law, forcing the people to mandatorily vote, be enacted. However, I disagree with compulsory voting in that democracy should respect personal freedom and right, and abstention is obviously a way to express political stance.

Election is one of institutions to realize democracy; so, it is meaningful when it is conducted democratically. If it is obligatory for the people to vote in national elections, their political right can be infringed in the name of democratic development. It is extremely contradictory. In other words, it is nonsense that the right to vote is forced mandatorily. Democracy can really be attained, only when election itself is conducted democratically. 

Abstention or refusing to vote should be respected as one way expressing personal opinion. For example, anarchism or atheism has been already accepted as ways indicating personal political or philosophical position, and same rules should be applied to voting. Namely, not to vote can be understood as intentional political unconcern. In fact, focus should be on irresponsible politicians, not on whether voting or not. In reality that even President does not keep his promises during election campaigns, how many voters are there wanting to vote?

Some people blame those who do not vote in that they give up the opportunities to change our society rightly, so run counter to democracy. High voting rate, however, does not guarantee democracy. For instance, in autocracy, elections tend to be tainted by corruption and high voting rate often becomes means to justify seizing power. Thus, the government should seek effective ways to boost it rather than compel voting. For instance, some countries in Europe introduced the proportional representation system to more exactly accept opinion of the people. In the case of US, Social media like Tweeter, Facebook or YouTube were actively used in the last presidential election.

Over 20 countries around the world are already forcing their people to vote by law, and among them, developed countries are also included. So, it is natural that compulsory voting be suggested in the country with very low voting rate like us, Korea. However, compelling voting should not be accepted in that it can infringe personal freedom and right, and abstention or refusing to vote are a way to express personal opinion. Also, especially politicians and social leaders before blaming those who do not vote, should find out ways to restore trust of the people and attract them to the polling places. That is the best policy to raise voting rate.

Yoon Jin Soo P.131 essay

 

Basic, Essential, Necessary things

 

 Nowadays, Korean unemployment rate is seriously high. College students

give up their happiness and study for getting a job. Recently many students

want to be a person who companies want because finding a job is very difficult.

Most of people become same. I'm just 2^nd grades so I don't prepare for

employment yet. So I want to talk about some skills that companies want.

 

    First thing is foreign languages. About 10 years ago English became most

important education so many people learned, but today most of Korean

go abroad for language studying or are raised in foreign countries. Nowadays

English is essential knowledge. For get a job, we have to learn more than 2

languages including English. So many students study for not only TOEIC,

TOEFL, TEPS but also many language skill tests.

 

     Next is creativity. Many companies aim creative people so they set exam questions

for finding creative students. Recently there are many books about sample questions

from tests of huge companies. Most of job seekers analyze and memorize

those books for get a job. I wonder these questions and tests are useful for

real creative people.

 

    Last thing is patient. Most of Korea companies have unreasonable structure.

Someone are promoted irrespective of their ability and someone get stress

because of others' jealous and envy. So patient is most important for Korean

employments. Many people leave their company because of these unreasonable

structures of Korea companies. For receiving salary, people have to ignore their

feelings and be in managements' good books.

 

    When we can't get a job for a long time, most of people blame and despise us.

Because we have to forget about us, friends and families for get a job.

Moreover we have to earn many money for live like a decent human being,

so job became basic element of human. Most of students put getting a job

above their health, pleasure and morality. We have to do that.

Ji Chang-Min, 200503311, five-paragraph essay on page 131, exercise 5

Chang-min Ji 200503311

Jon H. Bahk-Halberg

Intermediate English Writing(1)

May 15th.

 

I have three strengths for my future career

 

       Everyone dreams of the day when our dreams come true. For the day, we have to improve our ability and have done so. I　often estimate myself to become a more talented person. To improve myself, it's important to know what my strengths and weaknesses are. I also have three strong points; diligence, punctuality, patience.

       My first ability for my career is diligence. Diligence means steady, earnest, energetic application and effort. It is said that a diligent person must make it, no matter what the situation is, how much older he get, how excellent grade in his school year. I, who am diligent, will bring success in my career and wealth to myself.

       My second ability is punctuality. Dan Kennedy said that punctuality is the number one most powerful personal discipline in all the world. It was because he knew to keep appointments in time meant one's success, integrity and others' trust. Punctuality has been crucial to myself for my life. Being punctual made me respect myself, manage my time, improve my work, and have a high self-esteem.

       My third ability for my future career is patience. For my dream's coming true, I have to learn many things and improve myself. Whenever we attempt to learn something new, we have to give ourselves time which is whether long or short one. It is said that the most great acquisition needs the longest time. I have a lot of perseverance, so I believe I can acquire whatever I want to learn.

       Until now, I have introduced three abilities I possess for my future career. I am diligent. I keep my appointment in time. I have a lot of patience. Those abilities as well as others will make my dreams come true.

Hwang Yoo Jung, an argumentative essay on page 103

Is Free Downloading a Blessing or a Curse?

 

Hwang Yoo Jung  200904349

Intermediate English Writing I (Tue 78)

An argumentative essay on page 103 (first draft)

 

 

In May of 2000, a revolutionary Internet service, called "Soribada" was launched in Korea. This site, while offering free music files, had 20 million subscribers just after 3 years. After 11 years, however, Soribada, although it seemed to become a big business, keeps alive as a small one. What caused Soribada to fail was a free downloading problem which becomes more and more controversial. As for me, illegal downloading should be banned in that it can make musicians and producers lose big money; it can discourage their creative activities; as a result, all those things can damage the cultural life of public.

First of all, illegal downloading and sharing can cause musicians and producers to lose a lot of money. Just to write one song or release one record, considerable time and money should be spent. For instance, under the direction of producers, songwriters write a song and singers practice it many times. After that, producers actively promote and sell records to make profits. Just one click trying to illegally download, however, can undo all these efforts. According to a research conducted in 2009 by Copyright Protection Center in Korea, the number of illegal downloading was over 360,000, and the total sum of damage amounted to 180 million.

Secondly, illegal downloading can weaken the passion for creativity of musicians and producers and contract music industry as a result. Almost all creators want to get compensation for their hard work and keep working only when they get what they deserve. However, if they easily have their works stolen and if there are hardly any laws to punish such piracy, who on earth want to continue music activities? Like this, if musicians and producers are not protected as a copyright owner and furthermore they cannot earn enough money to keep up with their finances at home or the company, they could not keep going on their activities.

Meanwhile, those who download illegally often say that "sharing culture" on the Internet contributes greatly to develop music. For instance, when hardly accessible music such as records not reproduced any longer or censored songs, was shared on Soribada, users expected the musical world to be boosted by free resources. However, such resources do not have to be necessarily exchanged in free sites; we can share them as much as we like in pay sites. In fact, it's just a weak excuse to steal others' intellectual property. What is worse, the offending contents are more apt to spread by free distribution. After all, it is the public who loses opportunities to enjoy high-quality music due to this illegal system.

Nowadays Apple considerably controls music market around the world; in fact, it was never related with music industry in the past. This shows well how closely the musical world is connected with digital or Internet. Thus, it is natural that illegal downloading has appeared as a new enemy to harm the music industry. This free downloading should be banned in that it can damage music industry both creatively and financially and all those things can have negative influences on cultural life of the public. If Soribada actively had resolved the copyright problem, it now could be a successful company.