Basic, Essential, Necessary things
Nowadays, Korean unemployment rate is seriously high. College students
give up their happiness and study for getting a job. Recently many students
want to be a person who companies want because finding a job is very difficult.
Most of people become same. I'm just 2nd grades so I don't prepare for
employment yet. So I want to talk about some skills that companies want.
First thing is foreign languages. About 10 years ago English became most
important education so many people learned, but today most of Korean
go abroad for language studying or are raised in foreign countries. Nowadays
English is essential knowledge. For get a job, we have to learn more than 2
languages including English. So many students study for not only TOEIC,
TOEFL, TEPS but also many language skill tests.
Next is creativity. Many companies aim creative people so they set exam questions
for finding creative students. Recently there are many books about sample questions
from tests of huge companies. Most of job seekers analyze and memorize
those books for get a job. I wonder these questions and tests are useful for
real creative people.
Last thing is patient. Most of Korea companies have unreasonable structure.
Someone are promoted irrespective of their ability and someone get stress
because of others' jealous and envy. So patient is most important for Korean
employments. Many people leave their company because of these unreasonable
structures of Korea companies. For receiving salary, people have to ignore their
feelings and be in managements' good books.
When we can't get a job for a long time, most of people blame and despise us.
Because we have to forget about us, friends and families for get a job.
Moreover we have to earn many money for live like a decent human being,
so job became basic element of human. Most of students put getting a job
above their health, pleasure and morality. We have to do that.
200904082 Park, Jin-kyung
ReplyDelete1. This writing looks balanced and organized.
2. I like your idea about three required abilities the companies want since they represent practical abilities as well as inner abilities.
3. I didn't get the meaning of this sentence. " For receiving salary, people have to ignore their
feelings and be in managements' good books." I'm a little confused.
5. This writing has good content but there are lots of minor grammar mistakes and many korean-like expressions.
1. your main point seemed to be some skills employers wants when looking for workers.
ReplyDelete2. I would like to know more about tests to find creative students(applicants). Please give us a real sample question.
3. I particularly like how you organized this essay. And the length of sentences is various, so good.
4. I think, in the first body paragraph, you need to add some sentences for coherence.
BETWEEN : "today most of Korean go aboard for language studying or are rasied in foreign countries" and "Nowadays languages including English"
5. I could understand what you tried to say in the last body paragraph. However, I think you need to explain it more specifically and concretely.