Jang Jun Hwa
200802967
Intermediate English Writing (1)
A process essay about the stages of a festival (first draft)
Hope for Hitachi, Hope for Japan
"Love is like flowers which bloom in spring"
This is the first line of a poem written by G.Flaubert who was a French novelist. For many people, spring holds hopeful meanings such as love and a new beginning. If you want to feel the sense of happiness that spring can bring, why don't you travel to Hitachi? In Hitachi, you can enjoy a festival called Hitachi Sakura Matsuri, which means cherry tree festival.
Hitachi Sakura Matsuri has been held in every April for 50 years. All over town, about 14,000 cherry trees are in full bloom, and it seems that cherry blossoms cover the whole town over. Few weeks before the festival, people hang colorful lamps, which are cylindrical in shape, along the streets. Also, some residents who are participating in various local clubs prepare to show performances in the festival. For example, Hamaren, which is a club related Japanese traditional drumming, has participated in this cherry tree festival since it made.
In the morning during the festival, some small events are held. Children put on a lion or bear mask and perform a dance with a music, which is played by Japanese traditional instrument called Sasara. As for adults, the Hitachi Dance Festival takes place. As time goes by, more people converged on the festival.
The most important event starts in the afternoon. Hitachi Furyumono is a puppet show which is about battle stories in 14th to 16th centuries. Funny fairy tales or local legends are played as well. It is performed onstage on a huge float. The float imitates a castle of five layers and is luxuriously decorated. In 2009, Hitachi Furyumono was registered as UNESCO intangible Cultural Heritage of Humanity.
From 6 p.m. to 11 p.m., the time for Sakura Light-up begins. Many lamps that people hung before festival are lit. Before going back home, people lastly walks Heiwa Dori, the main avenue of cherry trees, to enjoy the bright light of lamps and the color of cherry blossoms, which are mingling together in the fresh night air.
Every year many tourist visit Hitachi in the spring for Hitachi Sakura Festival. Unfortunately, this year may be the first exception because of Japan earthquake and tsunami. The number of its casualties has increased every day. However, people say, after winter, must come spring. Japan must overcome this disaster, and will be more pleased than ever.
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ReplyDeleteI could imagined the scene of 'Sakra street'
through this essay. It was good
2.
This writing is about landscape of Hitachi Sakura Matsuri
3.
Fifth paragraph was good. Without knowing why,
I felt so magnificent.
4.
I couldn't find problems.
5.
Your essay is great but I'm sorry about just
few preparing process of festival.
Hwang Yoo Jung 200904349
ReplyDelete1. This essay is great. Especially I can feel literary grace in some expressions. And these expressions fit well with landscape of the festival.
2. Your main point seems to describe overall process of cherry tree festival.
3. I like the following sentences because they make this essay more sensitive and literary.
- "Love is like flowers which bloom in spring"
This is the first line of a poem written by G.Flaubert who was a French novelist.
- Before going back home, people lastly walks Heiwa Dori, the main avenue of cherry trees, to enjoy the bright light of lamps and the color of cherry blossoms, which are mingling together in the fresh night air.
- However, people say, after winter, must come spring. Japan must overcome this disaster, and will be more pleased than ever.
4. Well, I can't find any problems. Though, if you describe the following in more details, readers could understand better.
- As for adults, the Hitachi Dance Festival takes place. As time goes by, more people converged on the festival.
Jang Jun Hwa
ReplyDelete200802967
(second draft)
Hope for Hitachi, Hope for Japan
“Love is like flowers which bloom in spring”
This is the first line of a poem written by G.Flaubert who was a French novelist. For many people, spring holds hopeful meanings such as love and a new beginning. If you want to feel the sense of happiness that spring can bring, why don’t you travel to Hitachi Sakura Matsuri? It is a festival with about 14,000 cherry trees, which has been held in every April for 50 years in Hitachi.
In the morning during the festival, some small events are held. Children put on a lion or bear mask and perform a dance with a music, which is played by Japanese traditional instrument called Sasara. On other hand, adults participate in the Hitachi Dance Festival. As time passes, more people converge on the festival.
The most important event starts in the afternoon. Hitachi Furyumono is a puppet show which is about battle stories in 14th to 16th centuries. Funny fairy tales or local legends are played as well. It is performed onstage on a huge float. The float imitates a castle of five layers and is luxuriously decorated. In 2009, Hitachi Furyumono was registered as UNESCO intangible Cultural Heritage of Humanity.
From 6 p.m. to 11 p.m., the time for Sakura Light-up begins. Many lamps that people hung before festival are lit. Before going back home, people lastly walks Heiwa Dori, the main avenue of cherry trees, to enjoy the bright light of lamps and the color of cherry blossoms, which are mingling together in the fresh night air.
Every year many tourist visit Hitachi in the spring for Hitachi Sakura Festival to see many performances from small dance for children to Hitachi Furyumono. Unfortunately, this year may be the first exception because of Japan earthquake and tsunami. The number of its casualties has increased every day. However, people say, after winter, must come spring. Japan must overcome this disaster, and will be more pleased than ever.