Saturday, April 2, 2011

Chang-Min Ji - a five-paragraph process analysis essay

Chang-min Ji 200503311

Jon H. Bahk-Halberg

Intermediate English Writing(1)

April 2th.

 

Do you want to be a candidate?

 

         Most students have their dreams ; scientist, teacher, scholar, president or etc. Among them, the most korean male children want to be a president or to be elected as a member of the National Assembly. To become a candidate to run for office in Korea, what do you have to do? Let's see qualification, work ethic and process.

         First, we have to hold some qualification. Sex, old, level of education have nothing to do with the right. But we must be at least 25years old. And other elements limit qualification. For example, a person who has something about interdiction, election illegalities, imprisonment, disfranchisement, and so on can be limited to running for office.

         Second, we have to have a sense of mission, a kind of work ethic. We would rather try to question ourselves ; why I want to be officer in my own country, how I will make this country be better, what is it better, what method makes my goal achieved. If our own goal were just power, rich or honor, we had better quit the dream.

         Last, we have to file for Congress which needs to follow the administrative procedure. We are to register two days before the election day. And we need recommendation of a political party or from 300 to 500 general people. Moreover, we should donate 15 million won to the country.

         As you see, it is not easy to become the candidacy for seat in the National Assembly. It has demanding qualification, ethics and procedure. Of course, the most important thing is ethics, integrity and purity which anyone except oneself cannot evaluate objectively. I hope that more and more candidates hold qualification of morality as well as legality.

2 comments:

  1. 1.It's so simple essay but it contains almost
    useful information.

    2.This essay is about how to be candidate of congress

    3.'we have to hold some qualification'
    I learned something from this sentence. I didn't know the word 'Hold' can be used like this way.

    'If our own goal were just power, rich or honor, we had better quit the dream.'
    This sentence makes somd facts really strong.
    The fact that ethic is very important for candidate is emphasized.


    4.'If our own goal were just power, rich or honor, we had better quit the dream.'
    I don't know why you used past in this sentence
    and also the word 'Goal' has to be changed to 'Goals'


    5.3rd and 4th paragraphs are looks similar. I think these paragraphs have to become one paragraph.

    ReplyDelete
  2. 201181021 Huiyeong Kim

    1. I like the contents of the essay. It shows well about your thought about candidates.

    2. The main point seems to be the ways to become a candidate to run for office in Korea.

    3.The last paragraph is quite powerful to me. I always think that candidates have to hold qualification of morality as well as legality., too.

    4."~imprisonment, disfranchisement, and so on can be limited to running for office." I think if you omit "and so on", the sentence would be more stronger.

    5. I think this essay is a little unrelated to the process essay.

    ReplyDelete