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Intermediate English Writing (1)
Tuesday 7-8 period
a reaction essay(first draft)
Similar or Different Alleys
What do you think Seoul looked like 30 years ago? If you look at photographs taken by Kim Ki-chan, you will know how Seoul was like. The photographer Kim Ki-chan had taken photos of alleys in Seoul since 1980's. Here are two black-and-white photographs, which do not have the title. He only marked where and when he took them. In both photographs, the main center of interest is a child (or children), and there is a dog. However, each photo portrays different feelings of alleys in Seoul.
In the first photograph, there are five children almost in a line. They look close friends. They attach a long black tape to their and dog's eyebrows. They are making a wry face, which creates a humorous atmosphere. In the center, the tallest child is holding a baseball bat. Children may have been playing baseball before they were photographed. One boy is holding a dog, which is staring into space blankly. The dog might think that it does not care whatever children do to itself. What makes this photograph special is that children are not moving, but it does not seem quite. Because of children's funny facial expression, the mood of the picture is fun and enjoyable.
The center of focus in the second photograph is a little girl in the foreground. She is walking up the alley. In the background, there are a baby and an old woman. However, they are not seen well because they are just out of focus. Therefore, it seems as if a little girl is the only person in the alley. She looks isolated and lonely. However, there is something strange. The sense of solitude is not the only feeling this photograph gives. It also creates a sense of warmth and peace. The reason is because a little girl is carrying a spotted dog on her back. She may think of the dog as her best friend or her little brother.
The theme of both photographs is a child or children in an alley. However, they give different feelings. In the first photograph, five boys and one dog are the main center of focus. The impression of the first picture is communicated through children's facial expressions. It seems humorous and enjoyable. On the other hand, in the second photograph, the way a little girl is positioned is important. She is only with a dog in the foreground. This composition produces the impression such as loneliness and deep friendship.
Photo link
ReplyDeletethe first photo:
http://ftfile.hani.co.kr/editor/uploads/2008/09/02/17268_81640.jpg
the second photo:
http://pds1.egloos.com/pds/1/200512/08/34/c0051334_1272167.jpg
201181021 Huiyeong Kim
ReplyDelete1. What I like about this piece of writing is the topicof your photographs. The topic, Alleys in Seoul, is interesting to me.
2. The main point seems that there are some different moods between two photographs.
3. The word "wry" is quite powerful to me because I seldom see it.
4. "In both photographs, the main center of interest is a child (or children), and there is a dog." This sentence is a little awkward.
5. I think if you write the conclusion, your essay will be better.
2nd draft
ReplyDeleteSimilar or Different Alleys
What do you think Seoul looked like 30 years ago? If you look at photographs taken by Kim Ki-chan, you will know how Seoul was like. The photographer Kim Ki-chan had taken photos of alleys in Seoul since 1980’s. Here are two black-and-white photographs, which do not have the title. He only marked where and when he took them. Both photographs have children (or a child) and a dog as the central figures. However, each photo portrays different feelings of alleys in Seoul.
In the first photograph, there are five children almost in a line. They look like close friends. They attached a long black tape to their and dog’s eyebrows. They are making a wry face, which creates a humorous atmosphere. In the center, the tallest child is holding a baseball bat. Children may have been playing baseball before they were photographed. One boy is holding a dog, which is staring into space blankly. The dog look tired because these mischievous boys take around with it too much. What makes this photograph special is that children are not moving, but it does not seem quite. The mood of this picture is fun and enjoyable because of children’s funny facial expression.
The center of focus in the second photograph is a little girl in the foreground. She is walking up the alley. In the background, there are a baby and an old woman. However, they are not seen well because they are just out of focus. Therefore, it seems as if a little girl is the only person in the alley. She looks isolated and lonely, but there is something strange. The sense of solitude is not the only feeling this photograph gives. It also creates a sense of warmth and peace. The reason is because a little girl is carrying a spotted dog on her back. It appears that she thinks of the dog as her best friend or her little brother.
The theme of both photographs is a child or children in an alley. However, the impression two photos give is different. The way to give impression is different as well. The impression of the first picture is communicated through children’s facial expressions. It seems humorous and enjoyable. On the other hand, in the second photograph, the way a little girl is positioned is important. She is only with a dog in the foreground. This composition produces the impression such as loneliness and deep friendship.