Monday, May 23, 2011

Yoon Jin Soo p.144 5 paragraphs essay

 

Few options decide your vacation

 

 Vacation always makes people excited. Get out of the stuffy downtown and traveling in nature refreshes us. But Korea students can't enjoy their vacation well. They are always chased by studying and most of the time experience financial problems. So most of people can't realize their plans for vacation. In this writing, I want to talk about some options that are needed for vacation and categorize them.

 

 First, people have to make sure their time for travel. After making promise with friends and then we can make sure the other plan. We can travel in weekdays or weekends. If we chose weekdays, most of other people have to work in that day so we can enjoy leisurely travel. Also traffic might be cool. But travel in weekdays is difficult because we have to work or study in that day like others. In some case, the vacation is cancelled because of emergency situation in school or workplace. In contrast, traveling in weekends will be good for making promise but traffic condition must be bad and so many people are in vacation spots.

 

 Next thing is place. Korea is very small country but has many mountains and beaches. Mountain is one of the most popular places for vacation because there are many mountains near the city. It's good for short trip. But many people think beaches are better than mountains since most of them can't see beaches during their daily life. Other attractions of sea are sea breeze, wild beaches, surfing and swimming. In summer time, however beaches will be so crowded.

 

 Last thing is transportations. Your choice about transportations can have a great effects on your financial and time plan. If you choose public transportations, you can save money and it could be faster than your own car when the traffic is terrible. But in some time people spend their time for waiting their bus or train under the sunshine and it makes people so tired. When you use your own car you will feel comfortable and calm. Though if traffic is heavy, you will spend your time on the highway.

 

 Vacations can be tonic in our life but many people spend their money and time with more stresses. It's because they didn't plan well. As I said, If we make a good choice in many options like weekdays or weekends, mountains or beaches, public transportations or car, we can enjoy beautiful vacation without waste of time and money.

1 comment:

  1. 201181021 Huiyeong Kim

    1. I like your essay because it is clear each paragraph.

    2. The main point seems that people can categorize some options for vacation planning.

    3. The words "stuffy" and "tonic" are especially powerful to me.

    4. "~most of the time experience financial problems." This sentence is a little awkward to me.

    5. "Get out of the stuffy downtown and traveling in nature refreshes us."

    I think "Get" should be "getting".

    "In this writing, I want to talk about some options that are needed for vacation and categorize them."

    If you chage the thesis statement which starts "I want to talk about~", your essay will be better.

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